You coloring and lighting are spot on. Great job with that!
You do, however, need to work on blending and depth. And there's really no flow to it, but i'm not one to talk because i suck at flow. xD
As far as the text, I like it, but it seems a little off. When in doubt, hug the focal. But also remember rule of thirds.
Even with all the criticism, i do really like this piece from you. =)