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Ok lol Will be posted shortly. Im going to do NBA 2K12
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NBA 2K12 REVIEW
NBA 2K12 Review
Here is a review of NBA 2k12 (It was super hard to write with the Matrix on
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"End the Debate". I truely do believe that 2K sports did this with the newest installment of NBA 2k. With a repeating series that produces a game it is difficult to bring something new to the table each year.
yet every year 2K sports surprises me each game they release and this year is no exception. This year 2k sports introduced several new things, but with any game there were some downsides.
NBA 2k12 is the first game in the series to have built in 3D for PS3 and Xbox 360.This can be nothing but a positive! Who wouldn't want to throw down a Jam in 3D or hit the buzzer beater to win the game in 3D? I sure as heck would!
This year NBA's Greatest Mode is introduced. This is the concept that the entire slogan of the game is built around. You get to play as 15 NBA legends and essentially experience some of the greatest games of all time in immense detail such as; Arenas, Jerseys, Signature moves. It is very entertaining and really allows you to play as you're all time favorite players in a very new and unique way. I really enjoyed this new addition to the game.
There was also a few changes added to "My Player" mode, which is where you create a player and go through combines and allows to feel a more genuine NBA experience. Although I personally do not like the changes. Yes, the changes have made it more real, such as conversations with GM and lengthening the combine, but it made the My Player mode much more difficult and time consuming. In NBA 2K11 your player's skill would increase faster and essentially you would have better stats and games quicker. The new additions have changed this. You now have to play the game much longer for your player to get the same results to the My Player just the year before.
The NBA 2K games have been known for their dullness and simplicity. I feel that this game has shattered the common conception. Minus the small, minor disappointments, I really do enjoy this game. I highly recommend going and buying this game. Even those who aren't passionate about basketball will enjoy it
Out of ten, I would give this a solid 8/10.
Here is the NBA 2K12 commercial about "Ending the Debate". I find it quite funny haha. (Youtube, once again.)
[ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AKaeouLoLo8"]NBA 2K12 Micheal Jordan and Drake New Commercial - YouTube[/ame]
SYN Green Arrow
Hope you enjoy.
NBA 2K12 Review
Here is a review of NBA 2k12 (It was super hard to write with the Matrix on
)"End the Debate". I truely do believe that 2K sports did this with the newest installment of NBA 2k. With a repeating series that produces a game it is difficult to bring something new to the table each year.
yet every year 2K sports surprises me each game they release and this year is no exception. This year 2k sports introduced several new things, but with any game there were some downsides.
NBA 2k12 is the first game in the series to have built in 3D for PS3 and Xbox 360.This can be nothing but a positive! Who wouldn't want to throw down a Jam in 3D or hit the buzzer beater to win the game in 3D? I sure as heck would!
This year NBA's Greatest Mode is introduced. This is the concept that the entire slogan of the game is built around. You get to play as 15 NBA legends and essentially experience some of the greatest games of all time in immense detail such as; Arenas, Jerseys, Signature moves. It is very entertaining and really allows you to play as you're all time favorite players in a very new and unique way. I really enjoyed this new addition to the game.
There was also a few changes added to "My Player" mode, which is where you create a player and go through combines and allows to feel a more genuine NBA experience. Although I personally do not like the changes. Yes, the changes have made it more real, such as conversations with GM and lengthening the combine, but it made the My Player mode much more difficult and time consuming. In NBA 2K11 your player's skill would increase faster and essentially you would have better stats and games quicker. The new additions have changed this. You now have to play the game much longer for your player to get the same results to the My Player just the year before.
The NBA 2K games have been known for their dullness and simplicity. I feel that this game has shattered the common conception. Minus the small, minor disappointments, I really do enjoy this game. I highly recommend going and buying this game. Even those who aren't passionate about basketball will enjoy it
Out of ten, I would give this a solid 8/10.
Here is the NBA 2K12 commercial about "Ending the Debate". I find it quite funny haha. (Youtube, once again.)
[ame="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AKaeouLoLo8"]NBA 2K12 Micheal Jordan and Drake New Commercial - YouTube[/ame]
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Hope you enjoy.
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Jupiter
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Not bad..
make sure youre spell checking with your own eyes rather than a spell check.. theres a couple spots where you used the wrong form of 'your' or said 'knew' instead of 'new' you were also missing a couple periods so make sure youre checking all this out before submitting, etc..
overall pretty decent
make sure youre spell checking with your own eyes rather than a spell check.. theres a couple spots where you used the wrong form of 'your' or said 'knew' instead of 'new' you were also missing a couple periods so make sure youre checking all this out before submitting, etc..
overall pretty decent
SYN Green Arrow
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Alright, I edited some. I dont have word on this computer at the moment. So i'm just typing on notepad haha and it is hard to catch a few errors. So am i done till saturday?
SYN Green Arrow
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Alright, I'll see what I can do. Thanks again for the input and I look forward to the final decision
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I think i'm gonna do a preview over Halo 4 or the impact of the halo series on Xbox Live
xSteelx303
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Here is my long list of feedback, so please hear it out.
It is estimated they shelled out 150 million dollars, making it the most expensive game produced. It was in development for 4 years.
Your sentences need to have better transitions from each point that you bring up. Personally this is how I'd revise this sentence: "The game was completed within a four year development cycle and it costed Bioware 150 million dollars to produce the game, therefore making it the most expensive game ever created."
Additionally, please try to refrain from using third person and first person words in the same context. The first person perspective should not be used in such articles that are opinionated; game reviews and previews are great examples of when to use the third person perspective when writing. In other words there should be no "I"'s in your articles and it should be voiced in third person only.
Now that you have the run of the mill facts lets get into the analysis.
Never directly state that you're jumping right into the analysis because this can shift the reader away from reading any further. Frankly I wouldn't even include this sentence in that paragraph, however to close the paragraph I would simply find a solid last sentence that stages the rest of the review. Now the best way to go about this would be to include some sort of thesis in the beginning paragraph because the thesis is the roadmap that states what you're going to talk about the review specifically.
The biggest plus for me is the combat.
The above sentence is very plain and doesn't grab the readers attention. This is how I'd change that sentence: "Notably the best aspect about SWTOR is perhaps its combat system."
Now for the downside.
Again, no need to point out the obvious. You always want to change the writing style up and deter from it being dull. This is what I'd state instead: "Even though SWTOR provides an immersive experience, however there are a few shortcomings that one will come to find when playing this epic adventure."
Quests or Missions. While your major missions that are required are great and very entertaining, it is the optional missions that I really really do not like.
Deter from voicing your opinion directly, when writing a game review or preview you need to indirectly state an opinion on something. I'd also like to state that you need to add more reason for how the optional missions aren't as enjoyable as the main missions.
In conclusion, there are a few things that you need to work on. I personally think that you have the potential to be a better writer so keep on writing for that's the only way that you can become a better writer. However you need to utilize better word choices rather than using basic words, please use a thesaurus or buy one if you don't have one - it will make your words sounds more powerful and it will make the writing process more fluid.
It is estimated they shelled out 150 million dollars, making it the most expensive game produced. It was in development for 4 years.
Your sentences need to have better transitions from each point that you bring up. Personally this is how I'd revise this sentence: "The game was completed within a four year development cycle and it costed Bioware 150 million dollars to produce the game, therefore making it the most expensive game ever created."
Additionally, please try to refrain from using third person and first person words in the same context. The first person perspective should not be used in such articles that are opinionated; game reviews and previews are great examples of when to use the third person perspective when writing. In other words there should be no "I"'s in your articles and it should be voiced in third person only.
Now that you have the run of the mill facts lets get into the analysis.
Never directly state that you're jumping right into the analysis because this can shift the reader away from reading any further. Frankly I wouldn't even include this sentence in that paragraph, however to close the paragraph I would simply find a solid last sentence that stages the rest of the review. Now the best way to go about this would be to include some sort of thesis in the beginning paragraph because the thesis is the roadmap that states what you're going to talk about the review specifically.
The biggest plus for me is the combat.
The above sentence is very plain and doesn't grab the readers attention. This is how I'd change that sentence: "Notably the best aspect about SWTOR is perhaps its combat system."
Now for the downside.
Again, no need to point out the obvious. You always want to change the writing style up and deter from it being dull. This is what I'd state instead: "Even though SWTOR provides an immersive experience, however there are a few shortcomings that one will come to find when playing this epic adventure."
Quests or Missions. While your major missions that are required are great and very entertaining, it is the optional missions that I really really do not like.
Deter from voicing your opinion directly, when writing a game review or preview you need to indirectly state an opinion on something. I'd also like to state that you need to add more reason for how the optional missions aren't as enjoyable as the main missions.
In conclusion, there are a few things that you need to work on. I personally think that you have the potential to be a better writer so keep on writing for that's the only way that you can become a better writer. However you need to utilize better word choices rather than using basic words, please use a thesaurus or buy one if you don't have one - it will make your words sounds more powerful and it will make the writing process more fluid.
SYN Green Arrow
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Alright thanks, steel. I think all of those problems go back to me not taking my time. I'm typing them and not taking time and making sure they are good. So thanks again, this will help me alot.
XGC Paravain
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Your Article is not bad I just notice in some areas in your story sounds like your opinion of the game myself and this is just me I'd like to read just facts of the game your doing the article about but other then that and what Sakura mentioned to you good work and I'm looking forward to reading your Halo 4 article oh and about your computer with word just do what I do make a thread to wright your articles if you need a place to do that your welcomed to use my forums
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I'll just post them on here so that you guys don't have to search around for my pieces. So I'll try to proof read it multiple times and attempt to catch errors. I plan on uploading the Halo 4 article later tonight.
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TRu Squirrely
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OpenOffice is freeware and is similar to office. It also has a spellchecker tool. Sorry to interrupt.
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The Prophet and the Flood have both been destroyed and humanity is saved but in his bravery, Earth's greatest hero was lost. Through their valiant efforts to save the Earth, John 117 or as he is commonly known as, Master Chief and his A.I (Artificial Intellegence) Cortana were stranded in the depths of space.
After 5 long years on a destroyed floating vessel, we finally get to experience the fate of the great spartan, Master Chief.
Although Master Chief has been floating around in space for 5 years alot has changed back here at Earth. Bungie, the makers of the first trilogy are no longer the leaders of production.
343 Industries will now spearhead production. Many of the producers and designers were apart of all 3 of the first Halo's, so this isn't a huge deal as everyone first percieved. 343 Industries is looking to make Halo 4 much more interactive. In the previous Halo games, campaign missions were linear ( Essentialy, each mission is like a tunnel and you are walking down is completing objectives)
Halo 4 will now offer a much more hands on campaign experience.
Halo 4 is the first game in a new trilogy called, Reclaimer Trilogy. It will focus on the mysterious Forerunners. The Forerunners were an ancient civilization that paved the way for other species to advance technologically. They swore to protect all species from danger and in doing this, spread themselves to thin and were attacked by the Flood and thought to be extinct. Now they have returned.
Halo 3 ends with Master Chief and Cortana floating toward a shield planet, a planet shielded by the Forerunners to protect it from the Flood. So we can only assume that Halo 4 will pick up there. Players will also get to see how the UNSC (United Nations Space Command) will respond and rebuild after the massive destruction caused by the Covenant War. Human civilization is in ruin so it will be interesting to see how humanity as a whole responds.
All of the Halo games have been known to have epic multiplayer and Halo 4 is certainly no exception. Halo 4 will have an entirely new outlook on multiplayer. The INFINITY is the biggest ship that the UNSC has every built and multiplayer will be based around this ship. The multiplayer will be on the combat deck which builds holographic maps and game types which we the players will be participating in. Your character in the multiplayer will be a brand new breed of spartan called the Spartan IV. You will be faster and stronger and 343 has taken this into account with jump height, speed, etc.
Halo 4 will have the tradional XP system, but a new addition is spartan points. Each time you rank up you will earn spartan points (SP). You can use these SPs to customize your loadouts to fit you game style.
343 industries has made several changes to the Halo series but have also attempted to maintain the same "feel" of the first halo trilogy. Microsoft and 343 have been working diligently to try and make this the most epic, jaw dropping Halo to date. From various articles and interviews, it certainly has the possibility and potential to do so.
Halo 4 is set to be released sometime around the holidays in 2012.
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Hope you all enjoy. I did a TON of research for this lol.
Jupiter
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The Prophet and the Flood have both been destroyed and humanity is saved but in his bravery, Earth's greatest hero was lost. Through their valiant efforts to save the Earth, John 117 or as he is commonly known (as - not needed), Master Chief and his A.I (Artificial Intelligence) Cortana were stranded in the depths of space.
After 5 long years on a destroyed floating vessel we finally get to experience the fate of the great spartan, Master Chief.
Although Master Chief has been floating around in space for 5 years, alot has changed back here at Earth. Bungie, the makers of the first trilogy are no longer the leaders of production. 343 Industries will now spearhead production. Many of the producers and designers were a part of all 3 of the first Halo's,(Apostrophe not needed) so this isn't a huge deal as everyone first perceived. 343 Industries is looking to make Halo 4 much more interactive. In the previous Halo games, campaign missions were linear, meaning each mission was like a tunnel and you were walking down it completing objectives. Halo 4 will now offer a much more hands on campaign experience. (Reworded second to last sentence to avoid choppiness. The sentences now have a bit of flow rather than being split up by parenthesis. Also when speaking about past games, remember to use past tense words)
Halo 4 is the first game in a new trilogy called, Reclaimer Trilogy. It will focus on the mysterious Forerunners. The Forerunners were an ancient civilization that paved the way for other species to advance technologically. They swore to protect all species from danger and in doing this, spread themselves too thin and were attacked by the Flood and thought to be extinct. They have now returned.
Halo 3 ends with Master Chief and Cortana floating toward a shield planet, a planet shielded by the Forerunners to protect it from the Flood. So we can only assume that Halo 4 will pick up there. Players will also get to see how the UNSC (United Nations Space Command) will respond and rebuild after the massive destruction caused by the Covenant War. Human civilization is in ruin so it will be interesting to see how humanity as a whole responds.
All of the Halo games have been known to have epic multiplayer and Halo 4 is certainly no exception. Halo 4 will have an entirely new outlook on multiplayer. The INFINITY is the biggest ship that the UNSC has every built and multiplayer will be based around this ship. It will take place on the combat deck which builds holographic maps and game types which we the players will be participating in.
In multiplayer, your character will be a brand new breed of spartan called the Spartan IV. You will be faster and stronger and 343 has taken this into account with jump height, speed, etc. Halo 4 will have the tradional XP system, but a new addition is spartan points. Each time you rank up you will earn spartan points (SP), which you can use to customize your loadouts to fit your game style.
(Try not to use the same word over and over such as multiplayer.)
343 industries has made several changes to the Halo series but have also attempted to maintain the same "feel" of the first Halo trilogy. Microsoft and 343 have been working diligently to try and make this the most epic, jaw dropping Halo to date. From various articles and interviews, it certainly has the possibility and potential to do so.
Halo 4 is set to be released sometime around the holidays in 2012.
SYN Green Arrow.
Hope you all enjoy. I did a TON of research for this lol.
I have read through and marked any errors i noticed in red such as grammar, rewording, etc..
This article was definitely well put together and had lots of great information. I did say in some parts why i marked something but many parts i did not. I suggest comparing the two to see what i changed. hopefully this helps you out. Overall this is one of your better articles that i have read.. All that was needed was a bit of editing.
After 5 long years on a destroyed floating vessel we finally get to experience the fate of the great spartan, Master Chief.
Although Master Chief has been floating around in space for 5 years, alot has changed back here at Earth. Bungie, the makers of the first trilogy are no longer the leaders of production. 343 Industries will now spearhead production. Many of the producers and designers were a part of all 3 of the first Halo's,(Apostrophe not needed) so this isn't a huge deal as everyone first perceived. 343 Industries is looking to make Halo 4 much more interactive. In the previous Halo games, campaign missions were linear, meaning each mission was like a tunnel and you were walking down it completing objectives. Halo 4 will now offer a much more hands on campaign experience. (Reworded second to last sentence to avoid choppiness. The sentences now have a bit of flow rather than being split up by parenthesis. Also when speaking about past games, remember to use past tense words)
Halo 4 is the first game in a new trilogy called, Reclaimer Trilogy. It will focus on the mysterious Forerunners. The Forerunners were an ancient civilization that paved the way for other species to advance technologically. They swore to protect all species from danger and in doing this, spread themselves too thin and were attacked by the Flood and thought to be extinct. They have now returned.
Halo 3 ends with Master Chief and Cortana floating toward a shield planet, a planet shielded by the Forerunners to protect it from the Flood. So we can only assume that Halo 4 will pick up there. Players will also get to see how the UNSC (United Nations Space Command) will respond and rebuild after the massive destruction caused by the Covenant War. Human civilization is in ruin so it will be interesting to see how humanity as a whole responds.
All of the Halo games have been known to have epic multiplayer and Halo 4 is certainly no exception. Halo 4 will have an entirely new outlook on multiplayer. The INFINITY is the biggest ship that the UNSC has every built and multiplayer will be based around this ship. It will take place on the combat deck which builds holographic maps and game types which we the players will be participating in.
In multiplayer, your character will be a brand new breed of spartan called the Spartan IV. You will be faster and stronger and 343 has taken this into account with jump height, speed, etc. Halo 4 will have the tradional XP system, but a new addition is spartan points. Each time you rank up you will earn spartan points (SP), which you can use to customize your loadouts to fit your game style.
(Try not to use the same word over and over such as multiplayer.)
343 industries has made several changes to the Halo series but have also attempted to maintain the same "feel" of the first Halo trilogy. Microsoft and 343 have been working diligently to try and make this the most epic, jaw dropping Halo to date. From various articles and interviews, it certainly has the possibility and potential to do so.
Halo 4 is set to be released sometime around the holidays in 2012.
SYN Green Arrow.
Hope you all enjoy. I did a TON of research for this lol.
I have read through and marked any errors i noticed in red such as grammar, rewording, etc..
This article was definitely well put together and had lots of great information. I did say in some parts why i marked something but many parts i did not. I suggest comparing the two to see what i changed. hopefully this helps you out. Overall this is one of your better articles that i have read.. All that was needed was a bit of editing.
SYN Green Arrow
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Alright thanks! Im gonna try and get word in the next few days so hopefully this will help!
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Hey its getting better! That was my favorite one so far
That was my favorite one so far
XGC Paravain
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Not bad Yea just what Sakura is saying and Headline a good story always has Headlines like for example game description, what the game may include, and the multiplayer will make for a more organized and cleaner article for instance after I read your story I wanted to read the multiplayer section again I would be able to find it a lot easier with headlines lol
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